Tuesday, March 6, 2012

Revised Open Prompt #4 (Open Prompt 2)


Huge Impacts can be made in little or no time at all, as many important ones have. The amount of time a character has in a story doesn't reflect how much the character affects the story, in fact many stories such as Walk Two Moons by Sharon Creech. In this novel Sal, the main character, has embarked on a journey with a grandparents to learn more about her deceased mother. The characters develops immensely on this trip to retrace her mother's steps. Despite the fact that Sal's mother never appeared in the story alive, she still highly affected the action, development, and theme of the work.

The death of her mother takes a toll on Sal's whole family. Her father and her decide to move to Euclid, Ohio to restart their lives. This move, driven by the death of the mother, allows them to meet interesting characters that contribute to the novel's action. There’s for one Phoebe, a young girl who is in a similar predicament as Sal; her mom too is no longer with them. By aiding Phoebe find her own mother Sal attempts to understand her mother's circumstances as well. Sal's had mother decided to take a trip on her own to Idaho to visit family, on her way there she was killed in a bus accident. The major event however that was caused by Sal's mother, was the road trip to Idaho to visit her grave on her birthday. This trip was the major component in the story where everything is revealed. We learn about Phoebe and the other characters during said road trip.

In addition to contributing to action, Sal's mother also affected the development of the characters. The actions mentioned above which were caused by the mother also lead to major character development, especially seen in Sal. At the end of the book Sal finally comes to terms with the death of her mother and improves her relationship with her father and Mrs. Cadaver. During the trip with her grandparents Sal, finally finds out the whole story behind her mother's death and much confusion and anger is cured. This also mends her relationship with her father because of new found knowledge and understanding.
The character development is elicited by the theme of the novel: do not come to conclusions about someone until you fully understand their situation. Sal prejudged a lot of characters in the story like Mrs. Cadaver and her mother.. Sal also didn't realize how miserable her mother truly was when she left for Idaho. She realizes all of this during her road trip with her grandparents to see her mother's grave.

In Walk Two Moons, although Sal's mother posthumously appeared in the novel briefly she affected many aspects of the plot such as the action, character development, and them. Her mother’s impact was due to her importance to all the characters.

2 comments:

  1. I just did not understand your first body paragraph.
    I think if you wanted to show that the mother affected the action of the novel, you could just explain how her death caused the journey that sal completes.
    To properly show character development, I think you should contrast how Sal acted at the beginning with how she behaved at the end.
    Also, I think you need to prove your theme of the novel a little more. You are just explaining what happened, without telling me any specifics.

    Finally, your conclusion is pretty weak. Try to change the wording of the sentence to incorporate the examples that you gave in the essay. That way, it does not become a exact repeat of your thesis.

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  2. You're conclusions seems a bit abrupt, you do a great job in your introductory paragraph where you lead into your thesis so I think if you took the same approach with your conclusion it could be improved greatly. Think of it as slowly zooming out to the big picture, you want to tie in your examples and the various points of evidence you just laid out in your previous examples, eventually ending with your main thesis again. Otherwise I think you do a very nice job, just remember that with your first paragraph you don't want a plot summary. I know you need to give context to lead into your evidence but try to keep it as minimal as possible.

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